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Comment from: Rosekill
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The story isn't that bad. But you need to edit it. There are though a numerous amount of mistakes. You had a conjuction you put ... insted of a comma that was incorrect. A couple of thigs didn't make that much sense. When you use ... there needs to be a space between each period. You off to a really good start though. I thought it was good. Keep writing and dont make so many damn mistakes next time.
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